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Post  edrury on Wed Apr 25, 2012 6:35 pm

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Post  GinjaBug on Wed Apr 25, 2012 7:26 pm

haha...voted for you, ed!
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Post  GinjaBug on Wed Apr 25, 2012 7:38 pm

wanted to say too, you have such a sensitive soul for writing! what a touching and interesting story you wrote for this Very Happy . having feelings for someone and not sure how they feel...very relateable for many people!! study and it's good to see a guy writing about these things...Very Happy
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Post  edrury on Wed Apr 25, 2012 11:49 pm

Thanks Jennifer,you comments are much appreciated.
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Post  Star4mation on Fri Apr 27, 2012 11:46 am

You got my vote Ed Smile

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Post  edrury on Sat Apr 28, 2012 1:04 pm

Thanks Steve, I wound up in third which is respectable. Especially for a first timer. I won't even mention that the winning story was over the 250 word limit Sad since it was a good story. Better than mine, I think. I'll probably try to do this contest every week as an exercise (in humility.)
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Post  Star4mation on Sat Apr 28, 2012 1:23 pm

Third is good Ed especially when you were only 2 votes away from getting second place!!
I read all the stories and I think your's and the winner's were the only ones I actually liked Smile

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Post  GinjaBug on Sat Apr 28, 2012 5:05 pm

aw ed...well i think you did really good! i personaly enjoyed your story very much! i could compleatly visualise it Very Happy. i thought it was the most original of the entries. kind of struck a chord with me aswell. i am not just saying that because i think of you as a friend, either. i also like the 1st entry posted...even though i am alergic to dust. : )) i liked that one allot, though i think it kind of went off track from the idea given for the contest. shame they alowed a winner over the word limit. it clearly states on the contest rules about the number of words. why bother having rules? Laughing they prob had a ton of people in their contacts that responded to the voting too...
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Post  edrury on Mon Apr 30, 2012 1:12 pm

Well, I never learn. I sat down to write this weeks flash fiction prompt thinking somehow that I had 500 words (the limit is 250). I was really happy with my 500 word version of the story. Shortening it was a B*! You can read the shortened one here :

http://www.indiesunlimited.com/2012/04/28/week-18-flash-fiction-challenge-gold-fever/

Mine is the third one down and IMHO maybe the third best. I like the first story the best so far.

Here is the original version of the story (long version)

In the shadows of the stone columns the big cat waited, poised to pounce. Kisin had brought only one gift this time for the week amongst them had either lost spirit and quit or lost their lives in the quest. This is how it always went. Kisin possessed a mortal, assembled a quest and the strongest made it here filled with greed. Mortals were always possessed by greed, but Kisin chose his companions for each quest with care. Only those physically strong enough to make the journey. Only those who's lust for gold could push them beyond their normal abilities. Only then could Kisin bring a sacrifice worthy of the great Cat God L.

God L watched the two men, one he new as the current incarnation of Kisin the other a stranger. He could feel the body heat of the two humans as they stood over the pit of gold. The one calm and confident. The other excited by his schemes to claim treasure beyond imagining. As God L watched, his tail twitched with anticipation. Otherwise, he was completely still. The perfect predator, his pale green eyes nearly yellow in the torchlight cast by the two men. Kisin glanced in his direction and the muscles along the great cat's spine tensed as he prepared to spring just at the right moment to assure a clean bite. He must take care to take his prey down without stopping his pathetic heart.

Unlike Kisin , God L never bothered to learn the languages of humans. Why should he? He had the company of Gods to converse with. All cats speak the same language. It was a cruel language of fang and claw, but also great kindness so long as one remains humbled by their power and beauty.

The moment was drawing near. Kisin showed his companion the sacred dagger lying near the precipice of the pit. It was always returned to it's current resting place. It provided a convenient conversation piece to, shall we say, broach the main reason for coming to this place.

The two men walked toward the columns, intent on their conversation about their treasure. The relative merits of fame verses fortune and other silly human pursuits. As they neared the column behind which the great cat stood poised and ready, Kisin nodded once before guiding his guest around to fact the pit. God L sprang the instant the strange man's back was turned to him. His powerful claws pinning the mans shoulders pressing him toward the floor at the same time his fangs severed his spinal column between the second and third cervical vertebra.

Kisin swiftly cared the limp man to the alter and quickly removed his still beating heart tossing it to God L as he strolled out of the temple. “Till next time, amigo,” Kisin smiled to his old friend. The sound of purring rang through the ruins.

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Post  edrury on Wed May 02, 2012 11:43 am

This week, I'm not sure I am even going to vote for me. I'll probably vote for Rich Meyers. There are only four stories this time and I am in a battle for fourth place which is exciting. If you'd like to go have a look and vote for the story you think is best it is here :

http://www.indiesunlimited.com/category/iu-flash-fiction-challenge/

Oh yeah, and you can vote for me if you really want to. If I think I am in the running I will probably cast a vote for myself just to make it interesting.
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Post  GinjaBug on Wed May 02, 2012 2:26 pm

i voted for you, because i like cats...Very Happy study that's a cool picture they used for the insperation too! i'd love to visit the south west...one day!!


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Post  Star4mation on Wed May 02, 2012 2:38 pm

I like cats too Smile
Now you're in 2nd place Ed!!

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Post  GinjaBug on Wed May 02, 2012 2:43 pm

cat cat cat cat cat cat cat cat cat
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Post  edrury on Wed May 02, 2012 4:42 pm

OK, hadn't thought of the cat angle. I guess I deserve the votes then lol
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Post  Star4mation on Wed May 02, 2012 4:49 pm

Rich Meyers story was good, but no cats!! Smile

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Post  GinjaBug on Wed May 02, 2012 5:16 pm

hahaha ginnger cat purs loudly
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